Anything sent needs to end with a very clear ask. It must end with a request to settle the matter out of court rather than via a court prosecution.
If your job is to read many of these letters a day all you want to read is the first couple of sentences and the last couple of sentences. You must make them count.
When you read this stuff for a job you just want to know: what is this about? (first sentences) and what does this person want? (last sentences). All the rest just gets skimmed over.
So I have added a sentence at the end to the helpful suggestions by @MotCO and @30907 in case this is of help - see below
I would include both your and your partner's case references at the top as you are seeking to resolve both with the one letter and this will help make that as clear as possible
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Dear Mr. Morphew,
RE Case Reference:
and Case Reference:
Good morning. Thank you for the email, my partner and I had both received the prosecution tickets from the inspectors on the 31st of August
and have been actually expecting a mail by post from South Western Railway since then. Me and my partner started our journey from Wallington, and got our prosecution tickets at the same time on our way to Wool, but on our prosecution tickets it was showing that we were stopped in two different train stations (Clapham Junction and Woking, please refer to the attached issued prosecution tickets).
I would like to apologise and own up to the mistake as I was the one who purchased our train tickets.
We don’t always travel far away from London. I have only been in the UK for two years and my partner was just here for one year. As cliche as it sounds but I really did not understand the rules relating to the railcards, but now I realised that what I did was wrong, and will not repeat the same mistake again, that is why I did purchased the Two Together railcard as per the inspector’s instruction on the same day. Please let me know if there is any other travel you think I need to correct my payment for.
My ignorance brought my partner and me in this situation. And this was the lesson that I had to learn the hard way.
We would like to ask your kind understanding and consideration to this incident, especially for my partner as she has no knowledge when I purchased the train tickets, it was a supposedly surprise date to celebrate our 7th year anniversary last August. We are willing to pay the full price of our tickets to guarantee that we have no intention to evade our obligations as passengers.
Please see attached screenshot of our Two together rail card purchased on the 31st August 2024. Please note that I included my partner in this email to sort out this issue together, as she has not yet received any letter or email from South Western Railways.
Please refer to her reference number XXXXX
We would be grateful if you could allow us to settle this matter with you without the need for court action by paying for the fares owed and any administrative costs you have incurred investigating this.
Thank you.